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the other set of bios I've been working on, I would like comments and would like to know what you think.
Starlight’s Warriors: Bios
Name: Keyra Lang
Age: 2.78 billion
Description: Short reddish brown hair with green eyes, she usually wears a black shirt with black pants and a silver star chocker.
Keyra is the younger of two sisters. She is sometimes impulsive and can act or speak without thinking, and in this world that can get you killed. She has an uncaring attitude towards death, at least death in battle, always stating “There can be no more of a glorious way to die than giving up your life for that in which you believe”. She sees herself as nothing more than a sacrifice to defeat the Dark lady, no matter that her older sister and her mentor try to show her otherwise.
Name: Skyler Lang
Age: 4.6 billion
Description: Short black hair with brown eyes. She usually wears a crimson top with blue jeans under a white cloak that is held together with the clasp of a golden star.
Skyler, the older of the two sisters is already a starlight warrior at the beginning of the story. She has to try to show her younger sister that her life is worth just as much as everyone else’s. Her younger sister doesn’t know, but she knows that Keyra’s life is foreshadowed by a prophecy that foretells her impending sacrifice for the stars to defeat the dark lady. Skyler is carrying, and loves unconditionally, no matter what someone she loves does something that the stars think is unforgivable.
Name: Zeiry
Age: 6 billion
Description: Golden blond hair with yellow eyes. Often wears a dark blue kimono with a whit sort of trim around the bottom hem and sleeve cuffs.
Zeiry is Keyra’s mentor. She trains her and shows her the way of the starlight warriors. A group of individuals who can channel the powers of the stars and all the ideals of what light can be. She is the closest thing to a lover that Keyra will allow herself, but that is to be expected in a mentoring relationship, everything must be shared, the person’s mind, body and even their soul. Zeiry eventually commits suicide after Keyra’s death, despite the fact of knowing that she might come back some day.
Name: Ryo
Age: 8.6 billion
Description, Wispy white hair with pale blue eyes, often wears a silvery kimono with two swords crossed across his back.
Ryo is Skyler’s mentor and lover. He doesn’t have that large a role except mostly showing up in flashbacks that Skyler shares with her sister. He is soft spoken and always tries to keep the peace between his students and friends. He does get captured by the Dark Lady to lure Skyler into a trap as bait for Keyra, eventually leading to the final battle and Keyra’s death and ultimate willing sacrifice.
Name: Zeporis
Age: 10 billion
Description, black hair with black eyes and pure white skin. She often wears a cape of nothing but the shadows along with a black leather shirt and trousers.
Zeporis, more often just called the “Dark Lady” is the human form of the pure evil that the starlight warriors fight against. She is vindictive, cruel and not afraid to use what she has at her disposal, including torture, murder and rape. Sometimes it can be said that even in the darkest darkness there is always light, not in here. She has no soul, so cannot feel pain or anything else except most of the negative emotions, lust, anger, hatred and just plain evil to name a few.
Starlight warriors
This story takes ideas of the powers of good and positive emotion and gives them power. You can be feeling a large amount of enjoyment over something good like the winning of a game or first time having sex with your lover and that happiness is shown by the color orange. Here is a list of the emotions and what colors represent them.
White=light
Yellow=hope
Pail orange=peace
Orange=happiness
Pink=love
Red=courage
Light blue=caring
Dark blue=miracles
Purple=friendship
Hey, good concept.
The bios are a little vague, so it's kind of hard to tell ... But I think it could turn into something. :)
Scratch
it's turning into a massive freaking thing. there's going to be two other stories after the main one i'm working on now, it's got eight numbred chapters, two interludes and an epologue, and the epoliogue was done first. eight chapters might not seem very long, but they are at least one thousand words, and for me, that is a massive freaking thing.
LOL. So what ... 10000 words, maybe 15k? Something like that?
yeah, that might not be long to you or many other people, but for me who can only write an avarage of 600 words per chapter usually, for me that is long.
Why have the age of the characters in billions of years. It doesn't feel believable to me that someone that old would, for instance, commit suicide because of emotions, can you imagine how often they have loved and if they were, even remotely, human, they would've hit basically any scenario that would lead to suicide in the first million years or so. I'd find characters of more normal age more believable, especially if they all have human qualities in other aspects. Of course I'm only marginally a fan of sci fi ad may be I am too analytical, but if there's no reason for such a huge age in an otherwise human like characters I think it should be changed. Also, what are they, are they 6 feet tall, or giant or migits, do they look entirely human (you could have some fun with different shapes or body characteristics than we do, for instance, if you wanted to go that way).
Just some thoughts, seeing as I've dealt with Excel all day and I am excessively bored, lol.
cheers
-B
they are in essence stars. 2.5 billion equals the human age of 16. that's just the way it is. stars have longer life spans, both in this story and in real life. keep in mind, this is just the bios. i'm still plucking away at the first chapter. so Keyra and Skyler are still in their prime, while Ryo, Zeiry and the Dark Lady all have eons of experience under their belts
I haven't quite worked out the age sistem, and I don't think I ever will.
Starlight’s Warriors: Bios
Name: Keyra Lang
Age: 2.5 billion
Description: Short reddish brown hair with green eyes, she usually wears a black shirt with black pants and a silver star chocker.
Keyra is the younger of two sisters. She is sometimes impulsive and can act or speak without thinking, and in this world that can get you killed. She has an uncaring attitude towards death, at least death in battle, always stating “There can be no more of a glorious way to die than giving up your life for that in which you believe”. She sees herself as nothing more than a sacrifice to defeat the Dark lady, no matter that her older sister and her mentor try to show her otherwise.
Name: Skyler Lang
Age: 4.6 billion
Description: Short black hair with brown eyes. She usually wears a crimson top with blue jeans under a white cloak that is held together with the clasp of a golden star.
Skyler, the older of the two sisters is already a starlight warrior at the beginning of the story. She has to try to show her younger sister that her life is worth just as much as everyone else’s. Her younger sister doesn’t know, but she knows that Keyra’s life is foreshadowed by a prophecy that foretells her impending sacrifice for the stars to defeat the dark lady. Skyler is caring, and loves unconditionally, no matter what someone she loves does, even if it is something that the stars think is unforgivable.
Name: Zeiry
Age: 6 billion
Description: Golden blond hair with yellow eyes. Often wears a dark blue kimono with a white sort of trim around the bottom hem and sleeve cuffs.
Zeiry is Keyra’s mentor. She trains her and shows her the way of the starlight warriors. A group of individuals who can channel the powers of the stars and all the ideals of what light can be. She is the closest thing to a lover that Keyra will allow herself, but that is to be expected in a mentoring relationship, everything must be shared, the person’s mind, body and even their soul. Zeiry eventually commits suicide after Keyra’s death, despite the fact of knowing that she might come back some day.
Name: Ryo
Age: 8.6 billion
Description, Wispy white hair with pale blue eyes, often wears a silvery kimono with two swords crossed across his back.
Ryo is Skyler’s mentor and lover. He doesn’t have that large a role except mostly showing up in flashbacks that Skyler shares with her sister. He is soft spoken and always tries to keep the peace between his students and friends. He does get captured by the Dark Lady to lure Skyler into a trap as bait for Keyra, eventually leading to the final battle and Keyra’s death and ultimate willing sacrifice.
Name: Zeporis
Age: 10 billion
Description, black hair with black eyes and pure white skin. She often wears a cape of nothing but the shadows along with a black leather shirt and trousers.
Zeporis, more often just called the “Dark Lady” is the human form of the pure evil that the starlight warriors fight against. She is vindictive, cruel and not afraid to use what she has at her disposal, including torture, murder and rape. Sometimes it can be said that even in the darkest darkness there is always light, not in here. She has no soul, so cannot feel pain or anything else except most of the negative emotions, lust, anger, hatred and just plain evil to name a few.
Name: Shadowina
Age: 16
Element: Fire and dark
Discription: Orange hair, tan skin, red dragon wings and dragon tail, often wears something resembling a one piece bathing suit and has a belt with various weapons and a black tiara with an orange flaming jewel in the center of it.
Shadow is impulsive, Keyra’s reborn forme on Navu, She is trying to figure out who she is and is haunted by the memories of a past life that she can’t remember, but knows was something horrific. She is the leader of a clan of dragon anthros who are all fiercely loyal to her, well most of them are.
Name: Trinity
Age: 16
Element: Water
Discription: black hair and dark skin with blue dragon wings and tail, often wears a blue body suit held together with a clasp of a fish of some sort.
Trinity is the second in command of the Dragon clan and like shadow is impulsive. She has a temper on her and often gets into fights with other clan members which Shadow has to break up.
Name: liliana
Age: 16
Element: earth
Discription, fair skin with shoulder length brown hair with green dragon wings and tail, wears a brown cloak over a forest green body suit held together with a jewel clasp shaped like a rose.
Lili is the third in command of the dragon clan, but is the weakest of all of them. She is power obsessed and tries to assassinate trinity, but ends up failing. Eventually she betrays them all to an army of dragon hunters, forcing shadow to kill her, Traitors are not excepted in navian society, and are always executed.
Name: Sirus
Age: 19
Element: Dark
Discription: red hair with black spikes, red eyes, skin that looks like sower milk, wears a navy blue body suit with two scythes strapped across his back, one to kill dragon anthros and one for cat anthros
Sirus is the main villain, and the one who curses Shadow to the human world at the end of the second story. He is a dragon hunter and a cat hunter who has never yet lost a target. He has a deep lothing for shadow, and her for him, but the two are drawn to each other for some reason, one that neither of them can explain, it is one of those love to hate relationships.
grr, that first part didn't come out. this is the revised bio, for the second story in the starflame trilogy. actually coensiding with my posting of the first chapter of starlight's warriors!! so... that is all...